We could not capture the rhythm nor rhyme of each other’s stories.
Conversations weaved and wandered, mundane and misunderstood.
We heard sentences not sentiments,
Feigned commitment to our cause.
Curiosity faded so we cast hopes towards the stars.
Too many explanations spoiled our love.
44 words for d’Verse Quadrille prompt today: ‘Spoil’
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The last line says it all. Some people talk things to death.
I agree, too much talk that doesn’t get them anywhere. Thank you for commenting!
Great story of missing connections! Nice
Thanks so much, Jilly!
The metaphor of the poetry of communication in a relationship is very effective, Jo-Anne and I like the lines:
‘We heard sentences not sentiments’
and
‘Too many explanations spoiled our love’.
It made me think of the Love Story quote: “Love means never having to say you’re sorry”’
Kim, thank you for your thoughtful comments, I really appreciate them 🙂
I find this portrait of a relationship quite interesting…not necessarily ideal, but quite recognizable.
Yes, this relationship is definitely less than ideal. Thank you for reading and commenting!
Brings Eliza Doolittle’ famous lament to mind: WORDS! WORDS! WORDS! WORDS!
Sad and poignant poem.
And so well executed too, I must say, lovely! 🙋🏻♀️
Thanks so much for both your comments! I appreciate you taking the time :))
So true for so many. Sentences with no sentiment. Relationships are such a struggle! You captured it perfectly in the sadness.
Thanks so much, Mary. And, I agree – relationships can be a difficult. I guess we just have to decide if it would be better to part than to face a constant struggle.
“Too many explanations spoiled our love.” Oh so true.
To quote the Gloria Esteban sometimes “the words get in the way”.
I quote Gloria every chance I get :)) Thank you for commenting!
“we heard sentences, not sentiments” — this line has soooo much content in just 5 words!
I enjoyed your response to the prompt very much!
Thank you so much, Lillian!
Nice line explaining it all: “We heard sentences not sentiments”
Thank you, Frank!
Sentences not sentiments… that really say so much… you can spoil so much with words.
I agree, Björn. I think the missed sentiments are also signs that the chemistry is just not there. Thanks so much for reading & commenting!
Love your last line: Too many explanations spoiled our love. Short and powerfully written.
Thank you so much, Grace.
I agree, incessant talking, bickering and just plain explanation can spoil everything.
We heard sentences not sentiments, – this was a beautiful line, too often it is our own sentences we hear not the one talking